YES
This is perfect. Although some might find the faster paced annoying, i don't. I love it, and it fits perfectly with the cute love theme this flash has.
Your version > Original.
I liked it how the lyrics appeared as the song went on in the beggining, enhancing the feeling of... love? Gah, i feel embaressed of saying it :P
And i for one am a huge fan of simple drawn flashes, with characters slightly more sophisticated than stick figures. Beacuse you don't really need more. Thumbs up for the battle scene :D
You could've edited out the kiss scene, although nicely animated, it may be too "cute" for some audiences. Something that could've stayed between you and your girlfriend i guess.
In all i loved this animation so much i favourited it. Really. I've watched and re-watched three times so far today, and will probably watch it many times more.
Keep up the good work. You rock! :)
~ Frost